"Like a lepidopterist mounting a tough-skinned insect with a too blunt pin he screwed himself into her."Or how about last year's winner?
“Surely supernovas explode that instant, somewhere, in some galaxy. The hut vanishes, and with it the sea and the sands—only Karun’s body, locked with mine, remains. We streak like superheroes past suns and solar systems, we dive through shoals of quarks and atomic nuclei. In celebration of our breakthrough fourth star, statisticians the world over rejoice.”Literary Review editor Jonathan Beckman has some suggestions, such as "just make sense" and "don’t get carried away by metaphor."
Your humble correspondent has more prosaic advice: if you can't do it well, best not to do it at all, or as my old English teacher used to say about the comma, when in doubt, leave it out.
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